As the Internet has become more popular, so have online dating websites. Relationships have been formed over the Internet for many adults. However, picture an eighteen-year-old girl named Lizzie. Like many teenagers, Lizzie could not wait until college, when she could get away from her parents. She loved to rebel against them, so it came as no surprise to Lizzie’s friends when she dyed her hair with different colored highlights, pierced her nose and began listening to punk music. She downloaded her music illegally from different websites. One website in particular was based out of London, England. Lizzie was intrigued by this site and contacted the creator to ask how he got his music. They found out that they had a lot in common and became fast friends. They found each other on Facebook, exchanged screen names and Skype addresses. Their friendliness evolved into flirting, as the two continued to communicate. They began to video chat frequently and developed feelings for one another. She told her best friend about Daniel, hoping she would support Lizzie. He introduced her to his closest friends via Skype video chat and asked her to do the same. Lizzie followed his example and convinced her friend to talk to him. To Lizzie’s surprise she thought Daniel was funny and sweet and that he may be a good thing for Lizzie. She began to support Lizzie’s feelings for him. Daniel asked Lizzie to be his girlfriend and she happily accepted. He bought a plane ticket to America to see her that summer. As they anticipated their first face-to-face encounter, Lizzie’s friend began to have doubts about Daniel. She spoke to Lizzie’s mother and expressed her concern. Immediately Lizzie’s mother contacted Lizzie. She tried to talk sense into her young daughter. However Lizzie would not hear it. She stubbornly insisted that Daniel was not a mistake and that they had a powerful connection. She isolated herself from her parents and best friend, convinced that they would never understand. Daniel was her only friend; he was the only one who truly understood her. In less than a year, someone she had never met before became her everything. Unfortunately, he did not feel the same way and after his visit, he lost interest in Lizzie and stopped talking to her. She was confused when she realized his music site was gone, his Facebook was deleted and he never signed onto Skype anymore. She had given herself up to someone who could not have cared less about her. She had been fooled by a con-artist that had manipulated her on the Internet and in the process, isolated herself and was left standing alone.
What a sad story. I know it mirrors a lot of tragedy that emerges from online relationships.
ReplyDeleteMy suggestion is that the ending just stops and it needs to do more. A story rarely ends that way. Have a dramatic final image, such as Lizzie looking at the monitor late one night and thinking she sees Daniel log on. But she's wrong.
Add something to make the pathos more real for the viewer/reader. Keep in mind that "show, don't tell" idea that is key to all fiction. Show us Lizzie's loneliness and sense of betrayal at the end, with a telling detail.